Sunday, January 31, 2010

Lucy in Wonderland

If where this river dwells
Could afford a potent sea?
Would the acid she smells
Concede me an eternity?

Eyes once open, to the doors let me follow
Your quiet steps and let your candy woe
Be pencilled on my tongue. The undone
Fluids, adorned and bashful of the sun,
Slip underneath to do without the height
And trip us to the soils of Elysian delight.

When white flowers grow
Surreal on a cherry tree,
A flashback laves my row
To stay here, all over me.

As falls a night, garden wears dreamless,
Your tunes of clouded shadow harness
My rambling fancy by smoke downright.
And mix colours of doubts that might
Of distorted reality or impressionism art
A picture your tale airbrushed in my heart?

The last dose, the final kiss
Any split second may flee.
The rabbit-hole I failed to miss
Now misses a storm in me.

(She's better ^_-)



Arnav said...

beautiful :)

You got a new follower :)

Keep Writing and Smiling :)

Closed eyes... said...

Wow :) Amazing.

~*~ Jal Pari ~*~ said...

I could truly relate to it.

Simply beautiful!

You are one gifted writer Fareed. Keep up the great work :).

CyaNoir said...

Haven't I always told you that your writer makes me shiver and get goosebumps? Yea, almost stuff, you gots there.
March 5th, baby....march 5th. =D

Netha Hussain said...

This is wonderful..
"If where this river dwells
Could afford a potent sea?
Would the acid she smells
Concede me an eternity?"
Liked these lines the most..
Keep blogging..

Fareed said...


Felicitas said...

I love your use of imagery! Very powerful.

siras said...

Beautiful imagery. :)

Kay said...

makes me want to venture out and find my hole... wonderful!

Marion said...

Whoa! This is awesome writing. Thanks for stopping by my blog and commenting. You have a gift, for sure, Fareed, Blessings! (P.S. I love your tattoo...I'm designing my fifth one now to get in the spring.)

Alexandra Garland said...

Beautiful words, very personal, yet touch the reader deep.

Anonymous said...; You saved my day again.

Fareed said...

Savior, am I.